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To Whom It May Concern,
I am writing to apply for study visa for Germany in order to study in IIK BerlinerID,  courses are held on the campus of the University of Technology.
My name is xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx. I am 20 years old. I am currently studying Bachalor’s Degree program in division of German, faculty of Humanities at xxxxxxxxxxi University. In my family I am the first one that study major German and I would like to take this chance to study in Germany for finding experience. I had good abilities in such I can familiarize with everyone to easy , adjust in the new situation and my positive thinking or good attitude can make me learn something new without prejudice. By this opportunity I am going to study in Germany and I choose IIK BerlinerID and this course is beginning since 2.08.2016-30.05.2017.The reason that I choose IIK BerlinerID because this is located in capital and also has an interesting culture. And my destination apply for skills with education in university and daily life include a future career.

Berlin Germany is the biggest innovative center such as, architecture, history which attractive to me, because of its story that very interesting and there livelihood. If I can go to study in Germany, I will develop my skills because in Germany I can use german every time. On the other hand in my country is limited communication for german and it is not use every time so I think I should go to Germany better than stay in my country.

Currently the language is important, so I would like to learn a german language. A german language makes me get skills for use in the future. If I can go to Germany, I will bring skills, culture and experience for education, etc. I intend to my country and  study german to best. I will spend 10 months for the best value.

Thank you for your time and consideration.
Your sincerely,
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