I want you to correct wrong word in my writing. Thank u very much T_T
My answer
The table shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different culture activities in the past 12 months.
According to the table. There’re six activities in the list for surveying, any performance, undertaking any crafts, cultural purchases, any writing and computer based activity.
You will see that Scottish aged 16 and over are participate in activity about performance the most. For example, dancing, singing, acting, and playing musical instruments and etc. Especially, adults have age between 16 through 24 years old. There’re 35 percent of Scottish adults most likely to do any performance activities the same as adults have age between 25 through 44 years old (22 percent). However, adults have age between 45 through 74 years old most likely to undertake to do activities with crafts (22 percent).
It’s clear from the evidence that age plays a significant role in the popularity of the cultural activities list. (161 WORDS)
My answer
I disagree that modern lifestyle make many parents have little time for their children that cause they suffer. I think that how much giving attention to their children depends on parents’ commonsense.
Father likely to work outside in the past day the same as the present day because man has more factors that support to work than woman. For example, Man is stronger than woman. Man is safer than woman when work outside. So, father has little time at home to do activity with their children. The free time with children deduct from whole time that father spends to do another activities and his work.
Most women only do housework in the past day. However, in the present day that means modern lifestyle, woman also has little time to do activities with their children like man if they work outside.
However, having little time with their children doesn’t mean that it can make children suffer. Modern lifestyle is more comfortable than the present day that make people easy to live. For example, when their children sick, it’s easy to see doctor or take medicine to cure more than the past day. Moreover, the modern lifestyle have many facilities, transportations more than the past day. For example, telephone, car and etc. All of these support you to live and take care your children. However, If you lived in the past day but you didn’t take care your children enough, they tend to suffer.
In conclusion, I disagree that modern lifestyle make parents have little time to their children is a factor that cause they suffer. I think it depends on how much they care about their children. (
I would like someone who use english fluenly to correct my writing.. please<3
My answer
The table shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different culture activities in the past 12 months.
According to the table. There’re six activities in the list for surveying, any performance, undertaking any crafts, cultural purchases, any writing and computer based activity.
You will see that Scottish aged 16 and over are participate in activity about performance the most. For example, dancing, singing, acting, and playing musical instruments and etc. Especially, adults have age between 16 through 24 years old. There’re 35 percent of Scottish adults most likely to do any performance activities the same as adults have age between 25 through 44 years old (22 percent). However, adults have age between 45 through 74 years old most likely to undertake to do activities with crafts (22 percent).
It’s clear from the evidence that age plays a significant role in the popularity of the cultural activities list. (161 WORDS)
My answer
I disagree that modern lifestyle make many parents have little time for their children that cause they suffer. I think that how much giving attention to their children depends on parents’ commonsense.
Father likely to work outside in the past day the same as the present day because man has more factors that support to work than woman. For example, Man is stronger than woman. Man is safer than woman when work outside. So, father has little time at home to do activity with their children. The free time with children deduct from whole time that father spends to do another activities and his work.
Most women only do housework in the past day. However, in the present day that means modern lifestyle, woman also has little time to do activities with their children like man if they work outside.
However, having little time with their children doesn’t mean that it can make children suffer. Modern lifestyle is more comfortable than the present day that make people easy to live. For example, when their children sick, it’s easy to see doctor or take medicine to cure more than the past day. Moreover, the modern lifestyle have many facilities, transportations more than the past day. For example, telephone, car and etc. All of these support you to live and take care your children. However, If you lived in the past day but you didn’t take care your children enough, they tend to suffer.
In conclusion, I disagree that modern lifestyle make parents have little time to their children is a factor that cause they suffer. I think it depends on how much they care about their children. (