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(ACT1)
At dorm
Maria and Olivia are buddy. Today Maria is going to shopping.
Olivia : Maria! Where are you going?
Maria : I go to shopping.
Olivia : Um.. OK! You are shopaholic.
Maria : See you see you.
Olivia : Hey! Maria, This is your keys.
Maria : Oops! Sorry, I'm forget


(ACT 2)
At shopping mall
Maria enjoy with shopping and Then She is hungry.
She is finding the restaurant.
Maria : Oh! That's it.
Waiter : What would you like to order?, mam
Maria : Um Fired Chicken and orange juice
Waiter : Wait a moment please.

And thief comes into restaurant.
Thief : May I sit here?
Maria : Yes, OK (Maria is eating)
Waiter : What would you like to order?, mam
Thief : Only sandwich please.
Waiter : Wait a moment please.

Maria is enjoying having lunch. She doesn’t concentrate anything.
Thief uses her leg rake Maria’s hand bag and steals it.
Then she goes out. Maria is finishing the meal.
Maria : Waiter  Bill please.
Waiter : Twenty Dollar.



Maria is found her hand bag, but it lost.
Maria    : Oh! No, where is my hand bag?
Where is my hand bag?
Manager: What's happen? , mam
Maria      : My hand bag is lost, help me.
Manager: Calm down, mam.


(ACT 3)
At dorm
Olivia : What's happen to you?
Maria : Olivia my hand bag is lost.
Olivia : Why are you can't take care your hand bag? Why Why?
Maria : Don't break me.

In the morning
Maria's phone is rang. Olivia accept it.
Olivia : Hello! Um. (Send mobile phone to Maria)
Maria : Hello, Oh surprise. I going now. Olivia Manager found my hang bag.
Olivia : Oh It's nice


(ACT 4)
At restaurant
Maria come into restaurant and meet manager.

Maria : Manager Where is my hand bag?
Manager : What? I don't know.
Maria : You call me you call me  you found my hand bag.
Manager : No I can't call you. I don't know.
Maria : OK OK !!







(ACT 5)
At Dorm

Thief is thieving everything in her room.

Maria : Oh! No! not true. It’s important.
Olivia : Calm down, My friend. Don't serious
They are hug together.

Policeman is take photo
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