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Hello everybody i want to write my story to share and improve my english.

At this time i so confuse about my future. i graduate from university in design major but i work not about i study.
My family has own business and it can make more money than what's job i like to do. At now i have 2 choices.

1. I work at home and do i like when i've free times.
2. I will study continuous master degree about design and then i finished study i will work at there for along times.

If i choose 1 i may be business man, My life after that i think i have more money and warm hearted family. but i don't like about management, business and bla bla blaah. But really life i still want to spend money make my happiness. i still want buy something and travel. It is my happy to use money but when i work it's not, It's only happy when spend moneys.

If i choose 2 i may be artist, My life after that i think i have less money but i will happy everytime i work. One thing i care that's my future family, I afraid about money becuase it's very importent. I want to have big houses, cars, warm hearted family
and my good future sons. But this job i like to do it's not support my family.

Do you think what should i do ?   and please suggest me to write strong english grammar thanks you.
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Hello everybody.  I want to share the story of my life as a way to practice my English.

At this time, I am so confused about my future. I graduated from a university as a designer but I have been working outside my field of study.
My family owns a business.  This job earns more money than my preferred designer career.  Now, I have 2 choices:

1. Working for my family business on a full-time basis while continuing the designer career as a hobby,
2. Pursuing a master degree as a designer.  After completing the degree, I will seek long-term career within my field of study.

If I pick choice number 1, I will become a business man.  I will make good earning and please my family.   Although having more money to spend makes me happy as I enjoy travelling and luxuries in life, I dislike managing business and so on.

If I pick choice number 2, I will become an artist.   I will be poor but I will enjoy my work.  The one thing I care about is the future of my family.  I am afraid that I won't have enough funds to support them.  I want to buy big houses, nice cars and take good care of my family welfare, especially for my future children.   But the designer job I enjoy will not be able to earn enough money to support them well.

What do you think I should do ?   Please make comments to help me improve my English writing.  Thanks you.
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