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Good morning teacher
Frist of all thank you so much for giving me the opportunity to introduce my self
My name is………
My nickname is…..
You can call me …..
I’m fifteen yeard old my birthday is the 17 of may i was born in Bangkok
i went to ชื่อโรงเรียน for 3 years
My favorite color is black
My favorite food is pizza
My favorite subject is English
My hobby is blaying badminton
in the future i want to be doctor
I’m an hones and self-motivated
Our family has four people my father  mom grandma and me my father is an doctor and mother is a housewife
That’s all about me thank you